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she pulled up and parked.

as she lit a cigarette, she thought about all the hours left in the day, and all the things left undone.

she thought about her neighbor, a strange cat lady, and how her ridiculous amount of cats made the building stink, and how her downstairs neighbor cooked meth in his kitchen, and how sadly ironic it was that a drug-addict was constantly slaving over the stove and always growing thinner.

she thought about the school children, and how some of them would go home to a nice, warm meal and a bedtime story, while others went home to a beating and an empty stomach, while still others went home and killed themselves while their parents were arguing downstairs or fucking down the hall.

she thought about the lovers in the cafes, and how they'd smile at each other across the table, maybe ask the waiter to take a picture of them, knowing he wouldn't notice how one of the boy's hands was still under the table, knowing the girl would keep her face composed for the picture while his fingers pushed aside her panties.

she thought how she'd never felt so lonely in her life, listening to the train whistle cry. she watched the sun begin to dip below the horizon and the full moon appear on the other side of the sky, hanging her tragic head.

she stubbed out her cigarette and reclined the seat. time to stop thinking, it was making her feel more down.

out the driver side window, a light was slowly starting to brighten. it got brighter and brighter, until it was blinding. she looked out the window, and the light caught the back of her pupils, making them redden like in a photograph.

she smiled, like having her picture taken, the flash going off. her final thought, the last one, was how beautiful it was to be caught in god's headlights.
©2009 *L-forever
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i get creative with my suicides.

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:iconxtwostepfour20x:
Holy fuck.
This is beatiful.

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"You're only a rebel from the waist downwards." -- 1984
:iconnellie379:
simple and wonderful. you can give the reader chills so effectively with so few words :love:

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I will move away from here
You won't be afraid of fear
No thought was put into this
I always knew to come to this

Things have never been so swell
I have never felt so well
:iconl-forever:
thank you (:

and thanks for the :+fav:
:heart:

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Each man kills the thing he loves. -Oscar Wilde

The hawk on fire hangs still. Dilly dilly, calls the loft hawk, come and be killed. Dilly dilly, come let us die.

it's those stupid things we say in the rain, the words that can't ever be washed away.
:iconl-forever:
aw, really?
thank you so much (:

and thanks for the :+fav:
:heart:

--
Each man kills the thing he loves. -Oscar Wilde

The hawk on fire hangs still. Dilly dilly, calls the loft hawk, come and be killed. Dilly dilly, come let us die.

it's those stupid things we say in the rain, the words that can't ever be washed away.
:iconlosingmyfaith:
i liked it (: good work!

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" ...he's more myself than I am. Whatever our souls are made of, his and mine are the same, and Linton's is as different as a moonbeam from lightning, or frost from fire."
:iconl-forever:
thanks (:

--
Each man kills the thing he loves. -Oscar Wilde

The hawk on fire hangs still. Dilly dilly, calls the loft hawk, come and be killed. Dilly dilly, come let us die.

it's those stupid things we say in the rain, the words that can't ever be washed away.
:iconlosingmyfaith:
you're welcome (:

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" ...he's more myself than I am. Whatever our souls are made of, his and mine are the same, and Linton's is as different as a moonbeam from lightning, or frost from fire."
:iconxtwostepfour20x:
You're welcome. : ]

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"You're only a rebel from the waist downwards." -- 1984
:icondevelindiskies:
the ending had a lot of impact (no pun intended). You could feel the climax building from line one. Slowly escalating. This was great.

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Sometimes in order to help yourself, you need to help someone else.
:iconwebofdreams89:
This piece was wonderful! Great job!=D

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